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Some people say that government should control the amount of violation in films and on television to control crimes in society How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is considered by some people that violation in
movie
 and on television should be controlled by the government and thereby reducing crime in
society
.
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.
 Government should take proper step to stop violations in films and
movie
 industries. I strongly agree with
this
statement
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statement, however
however
film
 producers can play a vital role in reducing crime in
society
.
Film
 or
movie
 play a crucial part in human life. It
also
 influences their
life styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
, fashion, choices and culture.
For example
, when a famous actor
wear
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wears
 a fashionable suit in a
movie
, people specifically youngster wants to get
this
.
On the other hand
,
movie
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the movie
also
 represents something
that is
 harmful for our young generation. Recently,
film
 maker
include
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includes
has included
 a lot of naked scenes and due to the development of the technology
such
 as
internet
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Internet
, mobile,
this
are becoming
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is becoming
 available which influence our youth badly
.
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.
For instance, our young generation becomes addicted to the internet and suffering hopelessness and involves with different types of criminal activity.
Hence
 the government should take
initiative
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the initiative
initiatives
 to censor the
movie
 before releasing. To conclude,
although
film
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the film
 has some benefits, it can increase violence in our
society
. By controlling violence in
film
 and television government can decrease the rate of crime
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to or toward the inside of
in
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in on
in and
 our
society
.
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