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Some people believe that to be successful at a sport you need a natural ability and others think that hard work and practice can make you successful. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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active challenges, including, exercise and sports. For which, parents should instil interest in children, by engaging them in either sports or exercise. Especially, these days, many children are suffering from the problems of obesity, so being a parent, ensure that children, who involve in physical activities to keep their body healthy .
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