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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult.do you agree or disagree

#accessibility #university
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Needless to emphasise,
education
 is considered as the window to the outer world.
However
, whether the tertiary level
education
 is accessible to everyone regardless of their financial status? A lion's share of society argues that both wealthy and needy people are facing difficulty in pursuing higher
education
. I strongly disagree with
this
 notion and in
this
 essay. Will support my opinion with examples. Indeed, University
education
 required higher
amount
 of tuition
fee
. It would not affordable for student who are from
low-income background
Suggestion
a low - income background
low - income backgrounds
.
For example
, professional study courses
such
 as engineering
,
Accept space
,
 Bsc nursing are demanding a large
amount
 of admission
fee
 as well as
monthly tuition
Suggestion
the monthly tuition fee
a monthly tuition fee
fee
. It would not possible for many students from poor financial background to pay huge
amount
 to seek higher
education
.
Secondly
, most of the universities are situated only in metropolitan cities. It is
therefore
 hard for the pupil to access university
education
 since they are residing in
village
Suggestion
the village
 or countryside. They have to spend a large
amount
 of money for transportation and foster services.
Moreover
, these people wanted to leave their hometown and loved ones for a significant period of time.
Hence
 it is difficult to follow higher-level
education
 due to the lack of professional institution in smaller cities.
On the other hand
, some people believe that both rich and needy are struggling to get higher
education
 due to strict entrance criteria
such
 as examinations and interviews.
However
, there are more corruptions in validation of paper and it is possible for wealthy people to pay and get the enhance in their interested universities. In conclusion,
although
 universities are keeping tough entrance examinations for admission, there are more corruptions in those criteria and the high educational
fee
 and shortage of universities in smaller cities make difficult to avail tertiary level studies for pupil from low income status.
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