you have seen an advertisement of Australian magazines for someone to live with family in six-months and look after their six-years old child write a letter 1- Explain why you would like this 2- Give detail of why you are suitable person to employ 3- Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir and Madam I am writing

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your family starting from the beginning of

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reason why I am

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person for

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graduate student that studied the Nursery course which especially majored in Childcare from Melbourne University and looking for a short term job in the near future. I am currently staying alone; I would like to

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child care job

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particular knowledge

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I have learned at School will support me complete the job in

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way. I experienced in

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course and volunteer program which was organized by

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. I have leant to keep children engaged in

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of their parents and follow the prescribed schedule by guardians.

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, I am tidy, sincere, patient and hard working. When I feel free I spend my time

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reading

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children

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you have any questions, you can mail me at [email protected] or call at 445566677 Hope for a positive reply Your’s faithfully Minh Ky

Sat Nov 02 2019

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
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17Grammar mistakes
 

9 paragraphs

187 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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