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Some people believe that entertainers are more important than scientists. Do you agree or disagree? Support with reasons and examples from your own experience.

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Recently there has been a public debate of whether the sphere of entertainment is far more valuable than the scientific one. Since two of these fields are extremely
contraversive
a contentious speech act; a dispute where there is strong disagreement
controversies
controversy
 they cannot easily be confronted.
However
, I shall examine a number of profound impacts of each group on society which importance is virtually equal to some extent.
To begin
 with, to raise
national spirit
Suggestion
the national spirit
 is the main reason why the governments encourage the entertainers to proceed their activity.
For instance
, during wars, armed conflicts, global cataclysms and natural disasters they influence
general mood what
Suggestion
the general mood, what
the general mood what
 is highly critical and vital that in
such
 sophisticated situations people be supported to maintain their inner desire to live. Let alone that in peaceful times
this
 sphere contributes to the cultural development,
thus
, undoubtedly providing the importance of
its
the thing named or in question
it
.
Nevertheless
, those who are partisans of the opinion that scientists may benefit human sector far more efficiently provide mainly arguments linked to the healthcare and the technological environment. By virtue of inventing outstanding scientific inventions the only reason humanity has continued to dominate and to survive on the planet Earth for so long. Apparently, nobody can
imaging
form a mental image of something that is not present or that is not the case
imagine
 the future without modern and futuristic technologies.
That is
 why the merits of the science sector should not be underestimated. To summarize, both the
humanitarian
Suggestion
humanities
 and the engineering industries have profound impacts on human well-being particularly.
Although
 these two professions do not complement each other and
hence
 exist separately without intersecting. Admittedly, no way humanity is expected to survive out pleasure and educational evolution.
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