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Nowadays media should include more good news in their publications. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, there have been a tremendous increase in the number of media publications, the world over
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They play a vital role in providing up-to-date news to the viewers. Many people advocate that media, nowadays, s
hows
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show
negligence in providing good
information
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 to viewers. I completely agree with
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 statement, and below paragraphs are an attempt to justify my opinion.
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0th century
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the 20th century
has witnessed a proliferation in the number of media companies. To keep abreast i
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with
the market, tight competition exists between rival companies over the telecasting of news.
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, to grab the attention of viewers, and to increase the TRP, nowadays myriad channels and publications provide incorrect
information
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 on sensitive topics like religion, n
ationalism etc,
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nationalism, etc.
nationalism etc.
 which indirectly creates negativity and hatred among the citizens of the country.
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his indeed,
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This, indeed
 is an alarming situation. To continue, i
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the influence
of political parties is another reason which prevents the people from getting the accurate
information
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. In order to hide their governance failure, political parties bribe the media to divert the attention of a
udience
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the audience
audiences
an audience
from vital issues.
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, in India, many TV channels are owned by political parties just to telecast their propaganda news.
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, the news channels are not debating on vital topics like unemployment, health sector, women empowerment etc. News debates and articles favouring political parties are common these days
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 To conclude, there is no doubt that media are an integral part of a nation.
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, media nowadays are not transparent in providing good and accurate
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, they should include more positive news with relevant
information
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 considering the overall development of the nation, neglecting rival competitions and political influences.

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