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Ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazines or watching tv. Why do they do this. Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?

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The admiration people hold of celebrities is not a new development, and with daily increase in the number of media users the craze among common individuals is growing rapidly. Now the question is, is
this
 really a positive trend? In
this
 essay I will portray the reasons behind
this
 and my belief regarding the same. There are various factors which influence commoners
to imitate
Suggestion
imitate
 their favourite celebrities.
To begin
 with, people like to look outstanding and fashionable and to cope with peer pressure as well as sustaining the Fashionista image, they try to emulate their favoured stars by following them on social platforms like Facebook, Instagram, Twitter et cetera.
Secondly
, a fear of not being accepted amongst friends always plays in mind of especially the youngsters, who are the majority of any fan base.
Last
 but not the least, in today's workaholic society, the lack of proper monitoring by parents, which eventually leads to loneliness is
also
 a cause behind the same.
Although
 the tendency of copying others is very common, in my view, it is an unnecessary thing.
Firstly
, it is always appreciable when someone creates their own fashion statement rather than copying a celeb, which will ultimately bring happiness for themselves.
Also
,
this
 involves enormous wastage of money.
For instance
, to get along with the latest vogue, one teenager spends a lot to buy stuff from a renowned branded shop, which is of no use.
Nevertheless
, incapability of
following
Suggestion
follow
 up with the
trendsetter
a person who translates written messages from one language to another
translator
 can throw people into depression. To summarize, in spite of the fact that celebrities are the influence
to
Suggestion
of
 the community, it is always better to create own principle and value than to copy others.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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