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Some people believe, they should keep all the money they have earned and should not pay tax to the state. Do you agree or disagree.

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Money has become a vital part of our life. The current time of technological advancement, one of the most pressing concerns is regarding the given topic, which asserts that, should individuals keep their earnings; not make any contribution as a tariff to the state. I completely agree with
this
 statement and shall explore the same from various aspects in the following paragraphs.
First
 and foremost, some people argue that, paying tax to the administration is just a waste of money. They strength their viewpoint by claiming that, masses make wealth by doing lots of hard work, and
then
 they become eligible to pay levy to the state. But they do not receive any positive outcome, yet. Government facilities mostly do not help them, when they are in any problem. The best epitome of
this
 is that, 'Hindustan Times' published an article about their survey; facility provided in the hospitals and schools is worst. Due to
this
, most of the financially poor citizens have to go to private hospital for medical help, and pay to private Educational Institute for their children's education as well. So, they do not have any benefit of paying taxes. Moving
further
, they
also
 claim that, if tax make any contribution in the development of the country; why India does not count as developed countries,
such
 as Canada and America.
Moreover
, the population of Canada is just around 3.56 Crore, where as, India has 132.5 Crore of world's population. So, the executive of India, should get more money from tax. But, still there is a huge difference in the development of these countries. While, India should have the most developed country. The best example to proving
this
 explanation is that, 'World Bank bureau' conducted a survey and found that, about 70% of Indians, living under the poverty line. They do not have the necessary requirements for living: food, shelter and cloth.
Thus
, it can be ascertained that it is a debatable issue.
Although
, I believe that people who earn more than a predefined amount of money have to pay taxes, and not for those who earn less than that amount. So, the government should not force any poor person to pay toll.
Moreover
, the government should take some strict action to overcome the poverty rate, in which more than half of the Indians are living.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • welfare
  • public services
  • progressive taxation
  • distribution of wealth
  • civic duty
  • social cohesion
  • tax evasion
  • economic disparities
  • social unrest
  • individual rights
  • societal responsibilities
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