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Some people think it is not necessary for adults to receive education in class self study is a good way for them to study more effectively. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #adults #education #class #self #study
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Education is an all around development of the individual certain masses vocalize that
self-
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study
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 is a fruitful way for students to
study
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instead
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 of received education in
class
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.
However
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, teachers can motivate to learners
for
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to
study
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. There are numerous demerits of self
study
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.
Initially
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, they cannot learn discipline and communication skills through the
self-
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study
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. It is possible in the
class
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.
Moreover
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, they obtain
study
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 atmosphere in
class
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.
For instance
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, if pupils do
study
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 at
home
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home, then
then
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 they use
Internet
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the Internet
, play video games and watch television during their
study
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.
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, they cannot concentrate on their
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study
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studies
.
Futuremore
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Future more
, in the classroom juveniles do competition and challenge to other students.
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, youngsters do more handwork to achieve excellent marks.
Moreover
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, they obtain more notion with the help of teachers and classmates as well as, they can make many friends in
class
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 and able to improve their communication skills.
Further
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, they are not serious about their
study
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 because there
are
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is
 no authority which can control and guide them towards serious
study
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.
However
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, opponents consider that
self-
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study
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 is beneficial for students.
To begin
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 with, learners can save their time since they
not need
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don't need
 to
going
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go
be going
be gone
 educational institute and waiting for a bus. Along with
this
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, in the
class
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 teachers provide
deets
the event of dying or departure from life
deaths
diets
dates
 related to
syllabus
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the syllabus
, while during the
self-
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study
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 they can gain more knowledge. What is more, students
not need
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don't need
 to pay fees
consequently
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, everyone can gain
education
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an education
. To conclude
,
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,
in
class
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 students learn
serval
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Serval
several
 new things and make friends as well as, children obtain proper guidance for their future help to teachers.
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