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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Aggression the best way to lead children to
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Accept space
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wards) to discipline. To keep children under control, might have to sow violent punishment.
This
 essay will argue why entirely necessary smacking children, despite nowadays is not acceptable and censurable. Some parents believe smacking children are totally unacceptable as children are more sensitive of negative impacts as easier to spoil them. For the future, abused children could fray with others and so on might be unable to integrate into the real life. According to parents who are completely disagreeing to lead children by smacking, children get afraid of their parents
instead
 of discipline them. The other group of parents agrees with the topics as smacked children easier to lead. Mature behave has to be shown to children. Smacking children sometimes inevitable. Children like to try stretching their border as showing a very dangerous stunt, like running across the road or doing very irreverent behaviour, like shouting and hitting the parents. These behaviours are bad and very
unrespectful
. Smacking children
havier
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
is
Suggestion
been
 highly better than others. In my opinion the best way to earn discipline is, to show the mature behaviour and teach them how is the correct behaviour in different situation.
However
, I do not totally disagree not to smack the children, because sometimes you really have to punish children to keep under control them, but only
in
Suggestion
at
 the right time at the right punishment.

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