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People eat more processed food than they did in the past. Why is this? What are the effects of this?

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In the
last
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 few decades, the consumption of ready-made meals has increased dramatically. For people with long working hours,
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 is a fast and easy way to feed themselves. Precooked
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 might be convenient and
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-saving, but it is
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 unhealthy and can lead to several illnesses.
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 essay will discuss why people prefer processed meals over fresh produce and what effects
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 might have on them. Nowadays, most people are forced to spend long hours in the office, leaving little
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 for anything else, including the preparation of a healthy dinner. Most people find it more convenient to purchase a ready-made meal
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 of spending more of their
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 preparing it themselves. A very good example would be, where both parents need to work long hours and
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 still needs to prepare dinner, do homework with the kids and have family
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, leaving no
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 for oneself. Clearly, a processed diet is more convenient and
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efficient but
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efficient, but
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 have its downside. Processed
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 contains a lot of chemical preservatives, salt and sugar to keep it fresh and
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 for longer periods.
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 is very unhealthy in the long run and can cause diseases
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 as obesity, cholesterol, diabetes and even heart diseases. Recent studies in South Africa showed that almost 65% of people who only eat
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treats
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 tends to get one of these illnesses starting at an age as young as 8 years old. In conclusion, people with a busy lifestyle prefer the convenience of ready-made meals even though being aware of the unhealthy side effects caused by
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food
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