Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions.

in
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In
the recent
time
, obesity has become a pressing problem as compared to the past.
This
easy
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easement
will shed the light on obvious reasons behind
this
and some imperative measures to deal with the issue.
To begin
with, advancement in technology has gifted with
sedentry life style
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a sedentary lifestyle
sedentry lifestyle
sedentary lifestyle
sedentary life style
by taking away all
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
-intensive work
from
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of
humans that plays
fundamental role
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a fundamental role
to keep people healthy.
For instance
, people are using machines like vacuums
,
Accept space
,
dishwasher and
washmachines
etc.
to
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To
perform all chores
instead
of doing by themselves, all these items
has
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have
limit
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limited
excerise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
from daily life. Another chief reason is social media and all
techonlogical
based in scientific and industrial progress
technological
devices are so engaging that people prefer to spend
time
with them for an extended period of
time
instead
going for a walk or other physical activities that are
indespenbile
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
to maintain
fittness
the quality of being suitable
fitness
.
Last
but not least, over the
time
our eating habits have changed drastically, people are
obessed
having or showing excessive or compulsive concern with something
obsessed
of
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about
with
fast
food
, even knowing their side effects they are opting for unhealthy eating. All fast
food
giants are selling their
produsts
commodities offered for sale
products
at cheap price and making unhealthy items by using
high content
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a high content
of sugar and salt, so people can
easliy
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
get addicted to their
food
.
This
dietary shift is making people fat. These
step
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steps
should
taken
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take
into account to solve
such
a burning issue,
first
of all, a shift in
education system
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the education system
by making health education
compulsary
required by rule
compulsory
can create health awareness among people.
second
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Second
of all, by imposing taxes on unhealthy
food
and making fresh
food
cheaper can force people to indulge in clean eating.
lastly
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Lastly
, Govt.
should
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Should
make
out door
located, suited for, or taking place in the open air
outdoor
acitivities
any specific behavior
activities
accesible
capable of being reached
accessible
to people but
also
promoting them
thorogh
painstakingly careful and accurate
thorough
advertising or campaigns. All things considered,
t
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
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