Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions.

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, obesity has become a pressing problem as compared to the past.

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a sedentary lifestyle

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going for a walk or other physical activities that are

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but not least, over the

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our eating habits have changed drastically, people are

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about

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, even knowing their side effects they are opting for unhealthy eating. All fast

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giants are selling their

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a high content

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the education system

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and making fresh

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cheaper can force people to indulge in clean eating.

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promoting them

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Nowadays most people are not as fit and active, as they were in the past. What are the main causes of this situation? Suggest some possible solutions.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

The best way for a government to prepare for the future is to invest in young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that fittest and strongest individuals and the team can achieve success in sports, while others believe that success depends on mental attitude. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people think that parents should teach their children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the best place to learn this. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, there is a rapid increase of rubbish amounts all around the world. What are the main causes for it? What can be a solution, in your opinion?

The government should control the Internet to reduce cyber crime and ensure safety of users. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?