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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human's life. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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There are two schools of thoughts about the concept of human
life
, some are of the opinion that understanding past has nothing to do with the
life
 today, whereas others believe that history plays a strong role in the evolution of mankind. In my opinion,
it
it is
it's
 very important to learn historical stories to know how humans evolved through
ages
Suggestion
the ages
 and how can we use
this
 data to progress ahead.
Firstly
, there is a group of
people which
Accept comma addition
people, which
 has a strong concept that
past
Suggestion
the past
 has no influence on present day
life
 and it's useless to learn anything from the experiences of forefathers.
This
 bunch of people is of the view that due to technological advancements,
current generation
Suggestion
the current generation
 has
new set
Suggestion
a new set
 of challenges.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
,
such
 sort of difficulties were not experienced by the elders, so it's useless to study their lifestyle and phases of progress. So to say, it's better to spend time on new advancements rather than wasting time on histories.
For instance
, the current concept is being taught in Japan in
may
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 institutions.
Secondly
, knowledge of how mankind evolved, from dark ages to the present day, has a strong impact on
further
 progress, it's believed by many and I
also
second
 the same idea.
This
 thought will explain how
premitive
belonging to an early stage of technical development; characterized by simplicity and (often) crudeness
primitive
 people
faught
be engaged in a fight; carry on a fight
fought
fraught
fight
 with the
attrocities
the quality of being shockingly cruel and inhumane
atrocities
 of nature and used the brain to invent new things.
Moreover
, it will
also
 pave a path towards more innovations and inventions. So to say, if we want to lead towards prosperity, we have to turn the pages of
past
Suggestion
the past
 to find the solutions of problems by studying the experiences of
old
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older
 individuals.
For example
, many great nations of the world have preserved their past to get maximum benefit out of it. To conclude, I believe that
what ever
one or some or every or all without specification
whatever
 we are today, it's just because of the toil of our elders, so it's our duty to gain from them by learning their
life
 stories.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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