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Today, travelers are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?

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Until fairly recently, it has been noticed that voyagers are travelling more than ever before, and globalisation is the main reason for it, while there are several advantages for voyagers. On the one hand, globalisation is the main reason for travelling. The world has become a global village,
therefore
, people are travelling around the globe for education, occupation, and to work.
For Example
, In India there are many students who prefer to study abroad. Personally, I have done my post graduation in the Hotel and business management from International Business School, Isle of Mann, U. K.
Additionally
, nowadays companies are expanding their business overseas, which is another reason why people are travelling.
For Instance
, In India many multinational companies like Sony, Reebok are operating their occupation all around the world,
hence
 to attend their quarterly, half yearly and yearly meetings people tend to travel.
On the other hand
, International travellers enjoy n number of advantages of travelling around the world.
Firstly
, learning different culture, benefits a person in a long run, as one learns new things from it.
For example
, my neighbour had visited Europe a year ago and they have learned a new custom of planting trees
such
 as Money Plant, Cactus in the rooms,
as a result
 of
this
 I have seen my neighbours following the same footsteps.
Secondly
, People are now open to exploit more International opportunities in the field of education,
thus
 after completion they get jobs easily and better lifestyle.
For Instance
, if I hadn’t educated from Isle of man, UK, I wouldn’t have got job over a professional job in a renowned Renaissance hotel, Manchester as a Front Office Supervisor. In conclusion, people are frequently travelling around the globe for business and education, travelling,
however
, benefitted them to get global jobs and learn their culture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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