Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into a university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is often thought that the access to tertiary education is not easy for individuals, regardless of their financial background. In my opinion, I do not agree with

this

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view. I believe that

financialy

from a financial point of view

financially

financial

strong person

get

Suggestion

gets

admission in university easily compared to poor one. One of the main

reason

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reasons

why

refers to the speaker or writer

think that the

accessibilty

the quality of being at hand when needed

accessibility

realtively

in a relative manner; by comparison to something else

relatively

easy for rich students is because of high fee for educational disciplines. As a matter of fact, tertiary educational

programes

a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished

programs

are so expensive that even people with moderate income are unable to afford.

For instance

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, the

last

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year, a survey done by Oxford

univesity

the body of faculty and students at a university

university

stated that half of students in England were not able to afford courses offered by universities because of excessive charges.

Thus

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, it is completely clear that the admission in

such

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institutions

require

Suggestion

requires

optimal financial income. Another obvious reason is the amount of knowledge required to pass the

enterance

something that provides access (to get in or get out)

entrance

exam for academic

institues

set up or lay the groundwork for

institutes

which can only be acquired by studying for

longer period

Suggestion

a longer period

longer periods

of time.

In other words

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, students lacking in funds usually do not have enough time to prepare because not only they work hard to support their families but

also

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do overtime to get extra remuneration.

Consequently

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, poor pupils become unable to prepare for examination necessary to enter in tertiary educational institutes. To conclude, while people think that income does not matter to enter university,

refers to the speaker or writer

consider that the better financial situation leads to get admission

Suggestion

into

desired university

withount

in absence of

without

any hurdle.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

245 words

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