Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into a university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university

It is often thought that the access to tertiary education is not easy for individuals, regardless of their financial background. In my opinion, I do not agree with

this

view. I believe that

financialy

from a financial point of view

financially

financial

strong person

get

Suggestion

gets

admission in university easily compared to poor one. One of the main

reason

Suggestion

reasons

why

refers to the speaker or writer

think that the

accessibilty

the quality of being at hand when needed

accessibility

realtively

in a relative manner; by comparison to something else

relatively

easy for rich students is because of high fee for educational disciplines. As a matter of fact, tertiary educational

programes

a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished

programs

are so expensive that even people with moderate income are unable to afford.

For instance

, the

last

year, a survey done by Oxford

univesity

the body of faculty and students at a university

university

stated that half of students in England were not able to afford courses offered by universities because of excessive charges.

Thus

, it is completely clear that the admission in

such

institutions

require

Suggestion

requires

optimal financial income. Another obvious reason is the amount of knowledge required to pass the

enterance

something that provides access (to get in or get out)

entrance

exam for academic

institues

set up or lay the groundwork for

institutes

which can only be acquired by studying for

longer period

Suggestion

a longer period

longer periods

of time.

In other words

, students lacking in funds usually do not have enough time to prepare because not only they work hard to support their families but

also

do overtime to get extra remuneration.

Consequently

, poor pupils become unable to prepare for examination necessary to enter in tertiary educational institutes. To conclude, while people think that income does not matter to enter university,

refers to the speaker or writer

consider that the better financial situation leads to get admission

Suggestion

into

desired university

withount

in absence of

without

any hurdle.

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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into a university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. Do advantage of this development outweigh this disadvantages.

Nowadays young people lack an understanding of how to manage their finances after they finish high school. Explain why they do not know how to manage money and how this can be changed.

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?