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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years
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problems and emergencies are the central points in reports of media than the positive development.It is thought by some that
this
 trend is harmful to individuals as well as
society
.In my opinion, more of these activities create fear in common peoples mind but it alerts everyone about the surroundings.
Firstly
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lot of problematic situations in the media reports generates a query in individuals. It means they are looking for those problems in newspaper or news channels to satisfy
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the huge
. It reflects in the general conversations in social gatherings.
For example
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people talk more about the robbery
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murder
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violence as
conversation starter
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a conversation starter
in
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at
 parties and clubs than the general happy situations.
Moreover
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people are
frighteneded
made afraid
frightened
 about the
society
 and trust
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of
 mankind and good deeds are reduced.
crime
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Crime
 news, domestic violence reports
creates
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create
bad image
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a bad image
 of people surrounded by one.
people
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People
 feel unsafe
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unsecure every moment and that
leads
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lead
 to lose the trust
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of
 other people
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which has
bad impact
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a bad impact
bad impacts
 on
society
 to grow and prosper.
On the other hand
, the fact of real bad situations aware people to protect them from it.
This
 is useful for everyone.
T o
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To
 exemplify, a hurricane warning spreads all over the country to save peoples lives and to prepare the situations before ahead. To summarize, emergencies and problems reported by
media
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the media
has
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have
 more bad influence in
society
 than constructive impact.But
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it
it is
it's
awares
(sometimes followed by 'of') having or showing knowledge or understanding or realization or perception
aware
awards
 people to be conscious about surroundings and situations.
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