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Artists need a certain amount of freedom to develop their creativity |

Artists require the
freedom
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 of expression to some extent to develop innovative ideas. Some people argue that full
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 to express any opinion or ideas need to be given to artists. In my opinion, artists should be given enough
freedom
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 to express their
ideas but
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ideas, but
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freedom
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 is not required. Artists should have the liberty to express their views and original ideas without having to worry about the consequences. When they have the
freedom
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 to express, more and more people will turn to
arts
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the arts
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 will enrich our culture and civilisation.
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, many artists highlight several social issues and they spread awareness among the masses. Many of them stand for social justice. After a rape case of an 8 year old girl in India, many people expressed their anger and emotions through songs and these songs became viral on social media.
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Thus, it
 aroused feelings of many people and the authorities were forced to take immediate action against the criminals.
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, the art works should not have any destructive impact on the society. There have been several incidences where artworks like paintings created tension and violence.
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 M F Hussain’s paintings of nude Indian Goddesses created chaos among Hindu people.
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, objectifying women in various art works may negatively influence children and teenagers. They may see women as mere objects of lust and fail to respect them.
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, creating negative emotions through art increases the crime and violence in the society and can lead to many problems. To conclude, some amount of
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 is necessary for artists to thrive;
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freedom
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 can be a bad thing because it will encourage at least some artists to create artworks that have a negative impact on the society.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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