Women are better at childcare than men therefore they should focus more on raising children and less on their working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Although
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the care of children has traditionally been the
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of women, nowadays many men have decided to stay at home to raise children while the woman in the family goes to work.
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, some people believe that women have a natural ability for
childcare
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and
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role
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should be left to them. I disagree with
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for the following reasons.
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,
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men and women have qualities which are important for bringing up and educating children. These qualities are not specific to men or women,
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both
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genders are able to raise children successfully. By saying that
childcare
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is a specific female
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, children will receive a message which portrays women as carers only.
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, young girls who are taught to believe that the place of women is in the home may not try hard in school subjects which are more male dominated,
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as science.
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, the
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of women in the workplace has changed significantly in the
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fifty years. Many women now hold senior positions in many areas of employment. Women contribute a range of skills to the workplace which are
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valuable and important. In my opinion, women should continue to focus on their careers and ensure that their daughters are aware of the opportunities which are available to them in life. Men should
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take on some of the responsibility of
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and teach their sons that
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is a valuable
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in society
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men as well as women. In conclusion, it is important that men and women share
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duties because
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genders have important qualities and skills.
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, women and men should
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be allowed to focus on their careers and provide strong
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models for children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • nurturing
  • empathy
  • sensitivity
  • maternal instinct
  • paternal involvement
  • child's development
  • work-life balance
  • gender equality
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