some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. others believe that children who are taught to co-perate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by some of the people that
new generation
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the new generation
a new generation
of the mankind should be
enourgae
as much as necessary
enough
to be
competitave
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
rathen
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Rathen
rather
than co-operative.
Whilsht
the region of the United States lying to the west of the Mississippi River
West
Whist
,
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,
other
Suggestion
the other
are against
this
Linking Words
view. In my view
comepetition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
is necessary up to certain extend like
helathy
having or indicating good health in body or mind; free from infirmity or disease
healthy
one.
but
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But
definitely co-
operativeness
Suggestion
helps child to tackle the real life problem. On one hand, there is no
doubut
the state of being unsure of something
doubt
debate
in today's
high
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highly
demading
requiring more than usually expected or thought due; especially great patience and effort and skill
demanding
and fast paced world
comeptition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
is everywhere. So if you want your
oofspring
the immediate descendants of a person
offspring
to
ace
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
use
in any
field there
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field, there
is a lot struggle for
opporutnities even
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opportunities, even
opportunities even
though it has all the required
skillset
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skill set
and dedication
,
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,
this
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problem
arise
Suggestion
arises
emainly
for the most part
mainly
e mainly
becaus
for the reason that; on account of
because
of
competiton
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
of talented minds. For an example
,
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,
in India for a single medical exam around five
hundrad
being ten more than ninety
hundred
students. So in that
scenaro
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
competition is the key. In the context of
this
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kind of cases
,
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,
if
childern
a young person of either sex
children
knows
Suggestion
know
how the
competiton
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
works and how to prepare for it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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