There has been an increase in the number of working people facing health issues due to less physical activities. Most of the employees are exhausted by long working hours and prefer to spend their free time on gadgets, but fortunately there are ways we can solve this problem.

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It is true that a great deal of workers dealing with detrimental health issue have been constantly rising thanks to the

sedantary

requiring sitting or little activity

sedentary

life

style.

Although

the usage of computer devices

have become

Suggestion

has become

the

first

choice of many labours to consume leisure

time

owing to hectic working schedules, there are several other

feasable

capable of being done with means at hand and circumstances as they are

feasible

solutions are available to tackle

this

issue. On the one hand, working individuals are facing serious health problems due to reduced physical activities because they want to spend their free

time

siting

(photography) the act of assuming a certain position (as for a photograph or portrait)

sitting

and relaxing. The main reason behind

this

is their long official working

hours which

Accept comma addition

hours, which

they follow to earn handsome remuneration. As a matter of fact, employees become so

tire

Suggestion

tired

tiring

during

this

that they opt to use mobiles, laptops or television

inlieu

Suggestion

in lieu

of doing

out door

located, suited for, or taking place in the open air

outdoor

activities.

This

thing not only hinder them to become

physicaly

in accord with physical laws

physically

active but

also

lead to

life

threatening implications like obesity, and hypertension.

On the other hand

, there

ais

Suggestion

are

use

a wide variety of measures which can be adopted to spend off

time

and live satisfactory healthy

life

Firstly

, increasing wages by the organizations is one of the best

method

Suggestion

methods

to avoid working for

over

work done in addition to regular working hours

overtime

time

This

will not only provide extra

time but

Accept comma addition

time, but

also

give staff an opportunity to think about healthy

life

style.

Secondly

, government ought to make available parks and gyms in

vicinity

Suggestion

the vicinity

of residential areas. For

intsance

an occurrence of something

instance

, a survey recently done by Oxford university stated that inhabitants of cities with

the high

Suggestion

the highest

number of green areas have

generaly

usually; as a rule

generally

general

lower proportion of

illnessess

impairment of normal physiological function affecting part or all of an organism

illnesses

illness

Thus

, it is

completly

to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent

completely

clear that policy makers required to promote

out door

located, suited for, or taking place in the open air

outdoor

activities in order to have a healthy

coomunity

a group of people living in a particular local area

community

Suggestion

conclusion, While people are suffering from

obvious health issue

Suggestion

an obvious health issue

obvious health issues

due to dedicating extra

time

for work, better salaries and availability of leisure green areas is an efficient way to

aviod

stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something

avoid

laziness and promote healthy

life

among citizens.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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8Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

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Include an introduction and conclusion

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today’s world.” Use reasons and details to support your opinion.

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