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Genetic engineering is an important issue in society today. Some people think that it will improve people’s lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Gene is the life code of human beings. In the past, scientists did not have conditions to explore
this
 mysterious area due to the lack of resources and poor
technology
. Now they have capacities of revealing the secrets of genes. Meanwhile, different voices of genetic engineering begin to emerge. People
are separated
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are separating
 into two camps according to their positions on
this
 topic. Advocates of
this
technology
 claim the application of genetic
technology
 will bring benefits to the whole society covering most areas where people have been caring about since thousands of years ago.
For example
, people have been seeking an effective way to extend their lifespans from Qin dynasty in China. Now with the help of genetic studies,
that is
 not a dream for humankind, because there have been some relative researches on insects showing the possibility. On the other fields, genetic engineering is
also
 playing an important role to change people’s lives.
For instance
, transgenic
technology
 increased the supply of food,
then
 helped the society to solve the problem of starvation. But objectors can not be persuaded by the lobby of advocates. They insist that the genetic engineering is a violation of natural principles. The most argumentative example is cloning. They oppose it, and regard it as
a
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an
 unexpected threat to humans while believing it is a serious ethical issue. We
can not
can not
cannot
 deny what the two camps state, but in my view, I think we should not consider the issue so extremely. In our process of
society
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societal
 development, we faced many tough choices. But we
can not
can not
cannot
 quit the exploration and application of new scientific
filed
catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket
field
, and we
also
 need to caution the consequences of the misuse.
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