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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter 1. describe what you enjoyed about the course 2. say how much cooking you've done since the course 3. suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 letter to share my testimony for the short cooking
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 making Punjabi curries, which I completed
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 your school
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 month.
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 and foremost, I liked the duration and practicality of the
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.
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,
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 there were many
dishes
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 to prepare and learn,
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 was extensive enough to cover all.
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 to that, I enjoyed learning new ways to prepare
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 curries from other team members and learnt to give
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 touch of making
dishes
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 spicy. Post completion of the
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, I moved to Europe
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 Here I need to cook myself
everyday
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 due to my dietary restrictions, but fortunately, because of what I learned from the
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, I enjoy cooking every day. I try to prepare different
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 every alternate day
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 I spend 45 minutes cooking daily. Since I enjoy Indian sweets, I am excited to learn to cook deserts especially made from chickpea flour, sugar and condensed milk.
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, I request you to conduct a
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 on the same. I recommend
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course
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 to all cooking enthusiasts and look forward to learning new
dishes
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 in future. Yours faithfully,
Mr.
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 Manan Trivedi.

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