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some people argue that individuals can do nothing to improve the environment. Therefore , only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
In the recent times, the human actions have caused devastating effects on the
environment
. It is often argued that measures taken by the government and big corporations can have a greater impact as compared to individuals. I completely disagree with
this
 view, for two main reasons,
such
 as people can take measures that can help in reducing the pollution levels and can
also
 use environmental friendly products to make a difference.
To begin
 with, usage of private vehicles causes high pollution levels affecting our
environment
.
This
 is because individuals want to commute by private cars as it is more convenient and saves one more time.
However
, people fail to understand the adverse effects of the increase in the number of private cars has on the
environment
, as
this
 leads to increasing the emission of toxic gases like carbon dioxide in the atmosphere which pollutes the air. In a recent study, Delhi has been declared to have the maximum number of private vehicles, which has led it to be one of the highest polluted cities in the country. People can take measures by using public transportation, which can help in reducing the pollution levels in the city.
Furthermore
, individuals can use environmental friendly products.
This
 means people need to use products that can be recycled or can be used multiple times before they get disposed. It has been seen that one of the products
such
 as plastic, which is used as a shopping bag on a daily basis by individuals, is a product which cannot be recycled and causes a huge amount of damage to the
environment
 as it is not disposed in the right way. In a recent research, there were 20 million plastic bags that were found disposed in a landfill area near New Zealand. The individuals can take measures to reduce the usage of plastic by using alternative means
such
 as cloth bags. To conclude, along with the government and the corporate, the society should
also
 as a whole take steps
such
 as increasing the usage of public transportation and using environmental friendly products which can help in making a cleaner
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • renewable energy
  • conservation
  • corporate social responsibility
  • policy implementation
  • grassroots movement
  • environmental advocacy
  • legislation
  • systemic change
  • collective impact
  • green initiatives
  • pollution control
  • biodiversity
  • global warming
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