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Young people say that travelling to different countries benefits them and the society. Do you agree or disagree .Give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that travelling has many benefits, not only to an individual but
also
 to the
society
. Now a days many young people are interested in travelling to other countries. It will help to develop their overall attitude. I completely agree with
this
 statement and in
this
 essay I will support my view with examples.
To begin
 with, travelling has many benefits to our younger generation. In recent years, many people are interested in travelling to other countries for experiencing new things like their culture and languages.
For example
, young people can get an opportunity to meet many persons in the particular
country
 and they can discuss about various things
that is
 more prevalent in that
country
. Through
this
 communication, people get an idea about job opportunities and
also
 about developing sectors.
This
 would help young ones to adapt various cultures, languages etc.. To continue,
society
also
 gets many benefits from travelling. Through visiting many countries,
many
Suggestion
Many
 people get in touch with the new technologies
that is
 miler common as well as useful in countries. Younger generations can introduce various technologies in our community by using the ideas gained from their research and implement it in our
country
.
For Example
, many electronic devices used in our
society
 are very harmful to our health, because it emits a lot of radiation and damaged our body. But through the thorough study takes place about devices by consulting the specialists in another
country
, we can get an idea about the problems and solutions to solve the major issues.
Also
, we can introduce various technologies in our
society
that is
 more useful in other nations, in order to reduce the harmful effects produced by the electronic devices. To wind up, individuals get a lot of benefits means of travelling to many countries. It will help our
society
 as a whole
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