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some people say the internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier to communicate with one another.

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In the
last
 decade, the users of
internet
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the internet
 around the world became very high as
result
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a result
 of investing of smart phone which prices in the hand of most of
people
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the people
. As well as the
incresed
made greater in size or amount or degree
increased
 number of
communicatios
the discipline that studies the principles of transmitting information and the methods by which it is delivered (as print or radio or television etc.)
communications
communication
 companies that offer
internet
 service with less price compare to the past. I
completly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
 agree
to
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with
 that communication between people became more flexible because of the
internet
. There are several reasons beyond why I agree to that the
internet
 make communication easy.
first
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
 of all, people can
chatting
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chat
 or even make
video call
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video calls
a video call
 to their relative or friend in any part of
world
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the world
. As
result they
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a result, they
a result they
 will be in touch most of the time and they
are not miss
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are not missing
are not missed
have not missed
do not miss
don't miss
 each other. Another
adventage
the quality of having a superior or more favorable position
advantage
advantages
 of using
technolgy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
 is that you can study through video, webs or even take classes and
complet
having every necessary or normal part or component or step
complete
yuor
of you or yourself
your
 study.
For example
, people
complet
having every necessary or normal part or component or step
complete
completed
 their master
degee
a position on a scale of intensity or amount or quality
degree
 or take
course
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courses
 online. The huge benefits of
internet
 overweight some
disadventage
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
such
 as people can miss real meeting and
depened
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depends
deepened
defend
 to meet only
in
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on
 the small screen. In conclusion, I believe that the
internet
make
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makes
 the world as small town and the spread of news to people and meeting between each other became very simple.

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