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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The diagram describes the structure how to work
wave
-
energy
machine
 and what is the perfect location of the device.
Waves
 are used to produce
the
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electricity in
specified
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model
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.
Energy
 can be produced by using an Input Source just as Wind, Water or
Wave
. Wind
Energy
 has been widely used since the 1980s and is
evident
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 by the increase in the number of Windmills across the world. Lately, Researchers have shown that a
Wave
-
energy
Machine
 can be three times more effective than a Wind
Energy
 engine. On the spot, the design of the
wave
energy
 instrument may appear complex, after all the description of its inner workings detailed below will help a Reader understand it better. As the name suggests,
Wave
Energy
 device depends on
Wave
 as its Input Source. With the
wave
energy
machine
 installed on the seabed, the
wave
 direction is taken into consideration. As the water levels rise, the chambers located in the
Wave
-
energy
machine
 push the airflow upwards. Through the Air Duct located at the top,
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the air is pushed towards the Turbines,
that
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 increased airflow pressure causes the Turbines to rotate. The rotating turbines generate electricity, which is
in turn
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 passed through the top Chamber to the Output Source. The Location of the
Wave
Energy
Machine
 plays a significant role in the amount of
Energy
that
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produced by
waves
. Larger
waves
 produce a high output,
whereas
 small
waves
 produce low Output. It seems obvious, to install
Wave
-
energy
 machines in areas where there are large
waves
. But larger
waves
 have been too much expensive compared to small
waves
 An important point to consider, though, is that
Wave
-
Energy
Machine
 Installation in areas with high
waves
incur
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 high installation costs. So selecting suitable locations for Installation needs a thorough cost-benefit analysis
up front
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.
To conclude
, a
Wave
-
Energy
Machine
 Installed at Suitable Locations and designed well can be extremely beneficial in generating high
energy
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wave-energy, machine, waves, energy, wave with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 15 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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