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Some people think that media (newspapers) should publish information of people's private lives. While, others think newspaper should be controlled so that they don't publish news on people's lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In today’s changing world of media and communication, everybody gets all k
ind
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kinds
of information through newspapers and other sources of the media. People take a keen interest in the personal and professional life of celebrities, politicians and other public figures.
However
, conflicting views arise about the excessive media coverage of individuals. Some find it acceptable while others are against it. In
this
 essay, we will discuss both the views. On one hand, publishing news about artists and politicians is good for their fans and followers. As the youths today consider cricketers, politicians and actors as their role models, getting a glimpse of their personal life is not harmful in any way. The difference between an artists’ reel and real b
ehavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
can be depicted through media and news. In fact, we get to know about a political leader’s social a
ctivities
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activity
through m
edia
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the media
which helps us decide whether that politician is capable to rule or not. Other the other hand, the public should not forget that celebrities and politicians are
also
 human beings who deserve some
privacy
. Invading on people’s
privacy
 can
also
 lead to insecurity in their life. As many public figures have opponents and enemies, publishing private information in newspapers can have detrimental effects on their career. The overall productivity of the celebrities will increase when there is no
such
 conflict. To sum up,
privacy
 brings security,
therefore
, the media should not invade people’s
privacy
 for e
ntertainment
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entertaining
or profitable purposes. In my perspective,
privacy
 is one of the fundamental rights, and the government should control if the media publish any inappropriate information.
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