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Some people claim that workers should wear uniforms. Others allege that people should be free in their choice. Discuss both opinions, and give your own opinion.

#people #workers #uniforms #choice
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It is believed by some people
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 that employees should wear uniform
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which would promote workplace
productivity
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 while others think that employees should have freedom in choosing their office outfit
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 In my opinion
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 every company should have their unique
dress
 code which would be supported and accepted by their employees
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 Those who promote a specific dressing style at workplaces ponder that a workplace
dress
 increases workers overall
productivity
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 If there is no strict rule for wearing a uniform in organizations
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workmates
 pay attention to their colleagues'
dress
 rather than work
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 Statistically
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companies with a strict
dress
 code register better work
productivity
 as compared to those who do not follow
dress code
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the dress code
 since workers are not distracted by their coworkers’ clothing. Those who criticize work uniform suggest that
this
 approach violates the freedom of choice
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This
 means that you
can not
can not
cannot
 wear the
dress
 or suit of your own preference
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 As far as supporters of
this
 view are concerned, each worker`s main responsibility is to hold accountable for
delegated
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delegates
 functions not to follow strict and sometimes unnecessary standards of dressing.
For instance
, the study organized in Vladivostok Steel Company showed that 85 % of employees would like to wear clothes of their  personal preference because uniforms do not let them choose
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 outfit suitable for their job. In conclusion, despite growing
productivity
as a result
 of setting a proper wearing style, workplaces
forget
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forgets
 about employee freedom to choose their own dressing style. 
However
, standards of dressing ought to be set only if their staff show readiness and willingness to accept them.
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