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Writing Samples
Band 6

"Developed countries have created many environmental problems. What can be done to reduce the dangers of global warming?".

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Environmental problems have become a growing concern in recent years. These issues have been known to stem mainly from many westernized economies as against t
he poorer
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the poor
the poorest
countries. To prevent all mankind from possible annihilation, organisations could start taking the lead to prevent
this
 impending disaster by recycling wastes properly or even educating the masses on curbing certain lifestyles. One crucial step that can be t
aking
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taken
is to ensure that wastes are properly recycled. It is well known that the wastes
such
 as nylon used domestically are dumped u
napologetically
in drainages around houses in most urban cities and people do not realize that recent statistics has shown that proper disposal of wastes is the most effective way to save our planet.
For instance
, it is well known that farmers in Equatorial Guinea harvested much yield from their plantations after they resolutely agreed to clear all wastes found 100km all around their farm lands.
This
 is a good initiative and very commendable by everyone who heard the news. Another good step to shrinking the possibility of damage through global warming is public enlightenment. Governments and multinational corporations should take the lead in creating media communications on the ill effects of global warming and ways people can ensure they are not contributing to the problem. Sanctions should
also
 be introduced to prevent people from deliberately increasing the damage.
For example
, laws can be passed banning manufacturers f
rom
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of
p
roduce
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producing
production
goods s
ealed
disposed of to a purchaser
sold
in polyethylene materials. If
this
 is done and communicated to all manufacturers,
then
 there will be improvement in our global environmental system. In conclusion, though westernized countries have contributed to increased global warming, certain steps can be t
aking
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taken
to curb the menace.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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