The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98.
The chart bar below shows the result of an enquiry made to 100.000
people
from UK
about the Correct article usage
the UK
reasong
why theyCorrect your spelling
reason
reasoning
reasons
have
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apply
traveled
or not between 1994 and 1998.
The main reason why Change the spelling
travelled
people
decide to travel is because
there is a holiday and that trend stays Replace the word
that
along
the years and goes up in the number of Change preposition
over
people
who do it, showing a small decreasing
only in 1995 when it changes from 15,246 in 1994 to 14,898 the Replace the word
decrease
next
year.
"Business" has the
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second
place on the rate of reasons to travel and following the trend of holidays it has a steadily increasing growth, it starts in 1994 with 3,155 people
traveling
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travelling
,
and finishes in 1998 with 3,953. The Remove the comma
apply
next
place is for "visit to friends and relatives" which raises alongside years too and shows a slightly
Change the adverb
slight
difference
in number with the previous category, starting Replace the word
different
in
2,689 in 1994 and finishing in 1998 Change preposition
at
in
3,181.
The final Change preposition
with
cathegorie
"other reasons" is the one with the lowest rates and shows a fall for the final year, in 1994 982 Correct your spelling
category
categorise
people
travel for other reasons and it grows until 1997 when it reaches 1,054 people
and fall
to 990 in 1998.Correct subject-verb agreement
falls
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