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As part of a class assignment you have to write about the following topic. Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer.

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It has been argued by many that it's the responsibility of a government to keep a close check on the population growth by defining the number of family members and imposing extra taxes on the violation of
this
 rule. In my opinion, I agree with
this
 as an enormous increase in the family size will have a burden on the economy of a country as well as create different issues like unemployment, poverty and food crises. On the one hand, expansion of inhabitants has a direct impact on the economic conditions.
Firstly
, as the amount of members increase, the earning ones will face more difficulties to earn the bread and butter.
Secondly
,
this
 will be reflected in the overall economic condition of the state.
Moreover
, the per capita income of the nation will decrease resulting in an increased inflation rate.
For instance
, a recent report has revealed that the densely populated countries of the world have poor economic conditions.
On the other hand
, growth in the amount of citizens gives birth to many issues like lack of jobs and food. The increase has an impact on almost every sector of life.
This
 will lead to early consumption of resources, which ultimately produce many crises like joblessness, shortage of edibles and problems of cleanliness. All
this
 will lead to rise in poverty and the economy will collapse.
For example
, the Sudan, being the largest populated country, has the worst economic condition and the people are poor and under fed. To conclude, I think that there must be a constant monitoring by the rulers to keep the birth rate under control as it will lead towards the path of progress and prosperity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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