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Studies suggest that children spend more time watching TV than they did in the past and spend less on doing active or creative things. Why do you think it is the case? What methods can be used to tackle it?

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Laurence J. Peter has rightly said that ‘Television has changed the child from an irresistible force to an immovable object.’ After coming home from school, children spend a lot of
time
 in watching
TV
instead
 of playing outdoor games and pursuing other creative hobbies like in the olden days. In the following paragraphs, I shall discuss the causes of
this
 phenomenon and
also
 suggest some ways forward. The
first
 and foremost cause of
this
 is that due to the satellite
TV
,
this
 medium is available all the
time
. So much so, that some channels are exclusively dedicated to children.
This
 has made it very easy for the parents who use TVs as baby sitters.
Secondly
, parents are busy to cope with the demands of the fast paced life of today and after coming home after a hectic
days
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day's
 work do not have the energy to spend
time
 with their children. In earlier times, there were very few programmes for children and because of
slower life
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a slower life
, even parents spent
time
 with children. The solutions are
simple but
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simple, but
 the onus is largely on the parents. They should give quality
time
 to their children and ration their
TV
 viewing hours. Even the
time
 to play video games should be set properly. Outdoor activities should be encouraged and
neighbourhood
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neighbouring
 societies should be formed where children can play outdoor games with each other. Parks should be maintained properly so that children have a safe place to play outdoors. To put it in a nutshell, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that television and video games, in moderation, can be a good thing.
However
, excess of everything is bad and
therefore
 I believe parents should set viewing limits to ensure their children do not spend too much
time
 watching
TV
 and pursue other creative activities like they did in the earlier times.
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