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Governments should spend money on education than that of sports and recreation. Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, the budget allocation in a country has become, quite challenging for governments as people argue that there should more money allocation for
education
 than sports and other leisure activities. I agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay is going to discuss the benefits of
education
 over the sports.
To begin
 with,
education
 is an important aspect to boost the economy of a country.
This
 is because
education
 assists to increase the employment
rate
 in a country and there is a lot of skilled employment available for qualified people throughout the world.
However
, to have many skilled people, government should provide quality and affordable
education
.
For example
, according to a report in a weekly magazine in America during August 2015, America has very less unemployment
rate
 because the USA government provides best quality
education
 on minimal rates. What’s more,
education
also
 includes sports subjects which motivate students for extracurricular activities.
Therefore
, governments should concentrate on
education
 because
education
 has far better importance than recreation and sports.
Furthermore
, if a society has more social values' knowledge, the crime
rate
 would be reduced. Due to fact that
education
 creates a positive mentality among people.
For instance
, as per the BBC report telecasted on January 2015, Nigeria has a crime
rate
, which is 20 times higher than the USA.
Thus
, it is the responsibility of the governments to ensure that their citizens are well educated by providing them adequate infrastructure and other
education
 facilities.
In addition
 to
this
, governments, even can make the secondary
education
 free and mandatory so that it can allure more people to study.
Although
, sports and other recreational activities can improve health levels, what are the other benefits they can bring if people are living in poverty and engaging in crimes. To conclude, by analysing how allocation of money for
education
 can increase employment
rate
 and safe place to live, it is compulsory for governments give importance to sports and other activities but not at the cost of
education
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental right
  • crucial aspect
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • social inequalities
  • socioeconomic backgrounds
  • educational infrastructure
  • long-term investment
  • public health
  • community engagement
  • increased tourism
  • sporting events
  • employment rates
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
  • research
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • health pandemics
  • technological advancement
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