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Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Currently, students who are willing to learn
science
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 fields are becoming rarer in various countries. The reason to ths may be caused by the high level of difficulty in attaining a
science
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 degree and the low welfare of
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 graduates in recent years.
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 may pose a lingering threat
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 future generations if
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 trend keeps happening. Compared to other majors, natural sciences are known to have a complex theory that requires a difficult learning process.
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 posed an obstacle that drove pupils to choose another subject to learn. Yet despite the prestige
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 degree, many students felt that it is not worth pursuing considering in recent years, inadequate pay has become a convoluting
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 yet to be solved by policymakers. If a solution is not found in the near future, perhaps we have to prepare ourselves for the worst scenario. The lack of
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a priority by the country since there is simply no one who is knowledgeable about the
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. Massive decisions taken by the government mainly would be profit-oriented, without the consideration of talented academia in the respective field.
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 would lead to catastrophe and irreparable damage if not taken into account In conclusion, the allure of
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 subjects has been reduced
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 of higher expectations from society with disproportionate feedback to those who sacrificed themselves in
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. If their work keeps getting a dismissive approach, it can be assured that it will harm society anytime soon.

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introduction conclusion present
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Your opinion

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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