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Some people believe that allowing children to make decisions on every day choices such as food, clothes, entertainment will result in a society of individuals who think only of themselves, others are of the opinion that decision should be made about issues which affect them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Certain individuals opine that granting children the liberty to make daily choices like food, clothings and entertainment would likely result in a society of selfish individuals.
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, others believe that it is trivial to decide about matters affecting them. I believe, that
parents
Suggestion
parent
 should guide them in making important decisions. On the one hand, some individuals believe that giving children the freedom to make choices results in an environment of self
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
 people. Because, when children are allowed to have what they want, it makes them to request for more.
Thus
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, they would want more clothes, food, and extra Leisure time,
therefore
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 they become selfish and do not think about
emotions
Suggestion
the emotions
 of others. To illustrate, a child who is always allowed to watch cartoons in the sitting room, may want to continue viewing his cartoons even when visitors are present and his parents decide to stop him from watching.
On the other hand
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, others opine that it is necessary to decide for children. If decisions are made for them, it
aids
make an addition (to); join or combine or unite with others; increase the quality, quantity, size or scope of
adds
 them to make right choices and avoid
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 influenced by peers.
For instance
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, a child may want an item his friends have, but his family
can not
can not
cannot
 afford them.
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, he will be counselled on the need of
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 contented.
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, in my opinion children should be guided to make important decisions. If choices are to be made about career, it is important to guide them so they don't make choices that can be detrimental to their future.
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, from childhood a child can be groomed into what his parents want him to be in
future
Suggestion
the future
.
For example
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, a survey of undergraduates in a law faculty revealed that most scholars
choosed
pick out, select, or choose from a number of alternatives
chose
studying
Suggestion
to study
 law and are satisfied because their parents prepared them for the role. In conclusion, I believe that parents should guide children in making decisions,
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 they can be allowed to make choices in less trivia issues, but they should be
thought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 to respect
feelings
Suggestion
the feelings
 of others.

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