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Many people decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it. This, they argue, leads to a more satisfying working life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction: Since many years ago, a lot of people have been deciding on a
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 path early and follow it as they grow up saying that it provides them with a satisfying life.
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, while some many agree with
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, changing jobs may suit others more. On the one hand, it can be said that following a
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 from early benefits us. Specifically, if we set an achievement for our careers in the early years of our life, we can prepare for it more than a lately set goal.
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, if a child
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 to be a football player, he can prepare for it by focusing more on practicing the sport and working out rather than spending most of his time on academic works. As a
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result
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 will help one do better when they start their jobs later. Which, in case of the boy, may lead to a better performance than the others in a try out for a professional team.
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, an early work choice may disadvantage us as we grow. As an explanation for
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, many of us
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 our hobbies and interests as we grow due to external factors which usually lead to a
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 of preference for or
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. And when we
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 our preferences while we can
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 our jobs, it can lead to the unhappiness created by doing something we do not like. Conclusion:
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 but not least, the sense of achievement in a person’s life does not lie only in the pursuing of a particular
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. It is
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 important to listen to ourselves when choosing a job in order to develop a satisfying
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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