Nowadays, many people spend less and less time at home. What are the causes of this? What are the effects of this on individuals and on the society?

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The revolution of the world has taken a great impact on the humans. Some people believe that many individuals spend less and less
times
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time
at
home
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.
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could be due to the daily pursuit of greener pastures.
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essay will be discussing the causes to
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and the effects on humans and on the community.
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, many companies lack
adequate number
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an adequate number
adequate numbers
of staffs. When companies are short staffed, the daily
work
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load becomes enormous for the available workers.
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,
this
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will make them close late from
work
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and get
home
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late. Another source of
this
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issue is the bad road and the traffic jam encountered daily
as a result
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of the bad pathway. Unlike in the years past when few vehicles are on the road, now
alot
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a lot
of vehicles are seen on the road routinely which makes
movement
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the movement
so difficult even to the extent that humans face the body congestion as they walk because all the lanes are congested including the pedestrian lanes.
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, some individuals close from
work
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and spend
average
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an average
of 4hours daily on the traffic gridlock on their way
home
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.
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, when less
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time
are spent
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is spent
at
home
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and with the society due to bad roads or stress at
work
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place it results to negative side effect to the body. In
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I mean when an individual is stretched from excess task done at
work
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, there would be
tendency
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the tendency
of
constantly
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constant
illness because the body cells would be weakened
overtime
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over time
.
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, another consequence of
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is there would be no knowledge about the environment because most of the in each 24hours time has been spent at
work
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. When people do not know enough about the society the dwell in the always seem to appear as strangers. In conclusion, it is best that
adequate number
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an adequate number
of staffs are given that right amount of tasks so they can close early and
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the government should
fixed
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fix
the bad roads to enable the masses get
home
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without facing the traffic gridlock always.
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