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Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think discipline should be the responsibility of teachers, while others think this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Present day schools are facing the always rising Disciplinary issues. According to some people parents are responsible for inculcating the value of
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 in their children; others insist that it is the role of teachers. I agree with the former view. Different schools have different subjects depending on their child’s age and each subject is taught by a specific
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. It is highly unlikely that each
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 teaches the same standards of
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 for all pupils across all grades. Each child is different and have to be moulded depending on the child’s behaviour. To illustrate
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, the school near has 40 students in class. The
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 often finds it difficult to control the class and teach the lesson within the allotted
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. The
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 is more concerned about explaining the lesson and completing the course and gives less attention to those who misbehave in their class.
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, parents observe their kids very closely since their birth. They tend to spend a lot of
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 with their children during their free
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 at home. Since they interact more with their child, they have an opportunity to teach them
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 and mend their behaviour. Children often try to imitate their parents and learn behaviour skills.
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, my son wakes up early in the morning and gets ready for schools as we all get ready for our offices. To conclude
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 all the children and mend their ways within the allotted
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. It is the responsibility of parents to
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 their child and show them what is right and wrong.

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