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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Nowadays,
money
 is one of the most significant materials in our lives.
To
Suggestion
For
 many people, it is appropriate to marry for
money
 rather than
love
.
However
, I believe that both
love
 and
money
 should be combined in any
marriage
. Certainly,
money
 plays an important part in our lives. It is hard for any persons to accept a partner who does not have
money
 or at least a job to take care of their future family.
Hence
, it is said, “marry for
money
” is right in some extent.
However
,
love
 should be the root of any
marriage
.
Firstly
, it is because
love
 is
such
 a strong bond between two persons who have their own lives, and become one. So, they can share each other’s sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in their daily lives.
Moreover
,
love
 makes people grow up because they do not only have
responsibility
Suggestion
a responsibility
 to themselves, but
also
 to their partners as well.
That is
 why marrying for
love
 is always encouraged. In my opinion, I think that
love
 and
money
 are both necessary. A
marriage
 relying on
money
 would rapidly disintegrate when unfortunately the
money
 ran out. In contrary, a
marriage
 relying on
love
 would sometimes come to end when they could not earn
money
 to carry out family duties
such
 as paying bills, buying food, etc.
Therefore
,
love
 and
money
 should stand together in
marriage
 even though their contribution could be unbalanced. As we have seen,
marriage
 without either
money
 or
love
 would come to an unhappy end. So I believe that they both make their own contribution to a merry family.
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