In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products, for instance, clothing and medicines. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that it is unnecessary to eat animals or use products which are made by elephants in the modern society. In my point of view, I concur to

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claims and there are several reasons we can examine in depth in

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issue. The main reason to support my position is that it is unhealthy for human beings to eat

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animals as food. Take my friend, Tina,

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. She got serious disease

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year, and her family heard that snake could help her recover.

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, the snake is not only expensive, but

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made her situation get worse. The doctor said that

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kind of flesh is not suitable for everyone.

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, snake meat sometimes

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carries terrible diseases. From

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examples, it demonstrates that nowadays meat is not always the best supplements for people. Another reason for my belief is that vegetables can supply all we need for our health.

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, my sister, Jane, got birth to a baby boy in 2019. She is a vegetarian,

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, many friends suggested her to eat some pork or fish for better recovery. She insisted her choices, and after a year her hair is growing back since she lost some because of pregnancy.

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, it can be said that it is not necessary for eating meat as daily food.

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, you can have a healthy life for being a vegetarian. To conclude,

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health concerns, there are

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moral issues for consuming dogs or carrying bags made by cats. We have choices to be a more thoughtful man by creating an animal friendly world together.

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, that's why I agree with that we don't need to use animals as food or products resources.

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