Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In
this
contemporary world, despite the geographical boundaries, nations have become
identical especially
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identical, especially
in goods and services industry. In my opinion,
this
trend has brought up many negative impacts, among which lose of cultural identity and traditional businesses are
detriment
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detrimental
. Many countries are experiencing the lose of traditional, cultural values and identities due to free trade agreements. Most western dress codes,
for instance
, are convenient and easy to wear, as well as low cost compared to traditional costumes. So, people are increasingly changing over to more affordable clothes, as of which
this
trend
can leads
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can lead
to
extinct
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extinction
extinctions
some traditional values
from
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of
the society.
Furthermore
, traditional and religious festivals those valued for
long time
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a long time
are gradually replaced by the western celebrations,
such
as Halloween and Valentines Day, because of cultural identities can be
further
disregard.
In addition
, a large proportion of locally owned traditional businesses are wiped-off by billion-dollar multinational companies. In fact, free trade agreements between the nations have given
free-pass
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a free - pass
to multinational companies
to begin
their investments; sooner or later, traditional businesses are
shut-down
termination of operations
shutdown
due to the intolerable competitiveness.
On the other hand
, some may argue that open economy has expanded the job
market especially
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market, especially
in underdeveloped and developing nations that can positively impact on individuals and society;
however
, I believe that the negative effects on the traditional businesses is a detrimental than providing few extra jobs. In conclusion, I strongly believe that increase availability of goods and services, irrespective of geographical barriers, has developed significant adverse effects on the local traditions and businesses, provided that it is advisable to establish preventive measures to protect the local traditional values and businesses, before accepting the free trade agreement treaties.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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