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Social media marketing can influence what consumers buy.do you agree or disagree

#media #influence #consumers
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The world has shrunken to a small place since the introduction of social media.
Global market
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The global market
have been taken
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has been taken
 hostage by
instagram
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twitter
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facebook
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Facebook
 and social media applications.
This
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 essay will particularize the facts that how buyers are persuaded and compelled by the advertisements of the products on social media.The latter part of
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the essay
 will spell out the solid grounds that
i
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I
 believe
in are somehow
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are somehow
 affecting the users buying. As a matter of fact
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i
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I
 totally agree with the marketing by celebrities and glamour projected on social media have masked the intellect of buyers.Social media is a platform for information
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about
on
 all of its kinds for the user.
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 to
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it is
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skyrocketed
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skyrocketing
 by the availability of online sales centres.While sitting on the couch in your drawing room
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all you need is a card
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,
interent
a computer network consisting of a worldwide network of computer networks that use the TCP/IP network protocols to facilitate data transmission and exchange
internet
 access and a
smartphone you
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smartphone, you
 can buy anything from all the corners around the world. People on social media sets a trend by sharing
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tweeting.
while
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While
 putting a status online
infact
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in fact
 draws attention of many as well as lot fire in the hearts of watchers as well.Statistics have shown that
majority
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the majority
a majority
 of social media users are
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a young person of either sex
youngsters
 and the shopping breeze comes from looking
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at
for
 the attractive necklace someone is wearing. Illustrating my point
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of
 that when a potential buyer searches something online just to kill time.Later on the relevant adverts will pop on its own.Given the facts
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young social media users who are prompted and manipulated by current shiny trends and happenings by movie stars will always catch their eye. In the conclusion
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adverts
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the adverts
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the backbone of marketing are
form
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forms
 of
information but
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information, but
 with makeup and internet era
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informaion
a message received and understood
information
 catches everyone despite their age group.
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 spreading and flaring the current faster than the wild fire.
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,
i
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I
 would say in favour and it makes more sense
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in
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 modern age of
technoogy
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technology
, globalization and social media trends
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heart melting eye catching marketing determine what users buy.
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