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Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of their lives. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by some people that the
technology
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 revolution has taken over the charge of the lives of common people. While, some people think that, it brings a lot of benefits to the life of common people.
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 essay will discuss both views before drawing a reasonable conclusion.
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technology
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 has become an integral requirement of human beings as it provides various methods to communicate with the people regardless of any geographical location. People are now in contact with another person via an online platform
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 as Facebook, Twitter, and Instagram, etc.
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 causes a decrease in face to face communication, due to which people are lacking the confidence to effectively communicate with the people.
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, as per the research of GC University, those people who used an online platform more than 8 hours a day have trouble to speak with people. While, the positive, profound impact of the
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 cannot be overlooked in the form of the
internet
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 as it enables the students to attend the lectures online
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with
 a single click. While thousands of online databases are available to facilitate the researchers. The
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 has changed the paradigm of education by providing unlimited access to educational material in various forms.
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 as, YouTube is providing more than 10 million tutorials on enormous topics just by clicking the subscribe button. In my opinion, the advantages of the
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 outweigh its disadvantages. The implementation of automated methods in an industry increases production, mobile
phones
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phone
 ease communication and the
internet
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 changes the method of business and marketing, etc. To cope up with
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 topic, the overall advantages of
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 are comparatively greater than its disadvantages. As
technology
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 in the form of the
internet
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 has made every aspect of life easier while the people who are spending extra time suffering from issues of facial communication.
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