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Some people believe that anyone can create art such as painting, poetry, music and so on. Others think that a person should have special abilities to create art. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Art
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 is an assorted choice of
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people
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 with a lot of imagination and creativity. Artists imagine the environment in a different way and portray that in their
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.
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, some
people
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 advocate that expertise in any artistry can be achieved by anyone with practice. I opine that
art
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 is a creative task and one cannot excel in their career just by practising.
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views in detail.
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, it is rightly said that
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creative
people
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 are usually successful in fields like painting, poetry and music.
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, a painter needs to know different blends of colour which can make the painting more natural and attractive.
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, a musician should be capable
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 different emotions in the music composed by him.
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 to it, dancers should have the skills to convey a story or situation through their performance.
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, some
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 undergo regress training to gain knowledge in a specific field. Confidence and perseverance can make an artist
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win many accolades in their field of work.
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, hard work enabled Sudha
Chandaran
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Chandran
, a handicapped person, to get the Bharat Ratna award for her exemplary contribution to the field of dance.
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, without gaining knowledge about the recent advancements in
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art
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 forms, a creative person may not be able to have a competitive advantage over others.
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, I opine that any form of
art
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 is an arduous task.
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imagination
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imagination,
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 an artist has to
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put enough
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to manage
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 the ever-changing world and to create masterpieces

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task response
Your essay addresses the prompt to some extent, but the response lacks depth and fails to fully explore both views in detail. It would be beneficial to provide a more comprehensive and balanced discussion of both perspectives to improve task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
The essay's structure is somewhat disorganized, and the arguments lack clear development and linkages. The introduction and conclusion are present, but there is room for improvement in providing a more coherent and cohesive progression of ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal form of expression
  • inherent aspect
  • specialized skills
  • innate talent
  • specialized training
  • evokes deep emotions
  • resonates
  • folk art
  • street art
  • digital media
  • traditional institutions
  • formal education
  • groundbreaking contributions
  • rigorous training
  • profound art
  • inclusive activity
  • meaningful work
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