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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
It is believed that these days people have multiple alternatives.
This
 essay completely agree with
this
 statement because of advancement of technology and increased competitions in different markets. Invention in the field of technology has introduced smart ways through which people can connect to each other. Since
such
 ways enabled a person to sell or buy a thing online, it has given a birth to majority of options.
For example
, in the past, we had only one way of purchasing clothes by visiting a shop physically, which has now become one of the major choices for us with the introduction of e-commerce technology and
availabilty
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of multiple shopping applications over the Internet.
Such
 technical advancement filled our lives with too many choices. Yet another reason is that nowadays multiple companies come up with new ideas
of
Suggestion
on
 similar demand in the markets to maintain their position. Because of
this
, we see a lot of
products
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product
 availability for the same purpose.
For instance
, in the past in India, only few named companies
such
 as Tata Motors, Hyundai or Toyota's
suv
Suggestion
SUV
segement
one of several parts or pieces that fit with others to constitute a whole object
segment
 cars were famous among people, but today, there are new brands like MG, KIA, MARUTI or HONDA come up with their own smartly developed SUVs.
This
 acceleration in competition
become
Suggestion
becomes
 another reason for having different
availablities
the quality of being at hand when needed
availabilities
. To conclude, we were having less choices in the
past but
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past, but
 today with the new advent in the technical field and
more competition
Suggestion
more competitive
 in the markets left us in the middle of a plethora of choices.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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