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Topic: More people today prefer to live alone in comparison to the past. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development . Give your opinion and relevant examples to support your views.

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In today’s era, living independently has become a trend. A popular stratum of the modern society tends to believe in nuclear family
life
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, while ancient people were in support of joint family. I strongly believe that person who live independent
life
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 has privacy and normally have
better
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a better life
life
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 on
economic front
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the economic front
.
This
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view
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views
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Firstly
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, Economic development has become the major cause of drift of society from joint to nuclear family. People
of
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in
 modern
life
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 are more affluent than past,
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individual
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individuals
the individual
 can afford to live alone.
Single person family
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Single person, family
The single person family
The single person family The single person family
certainly need
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certainly needs
 to have a steady income source while, joint families normally have
one
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 earner and rest depends on them.
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, per capita income has increased which is a step towards economic growth.
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, Humans are very impatient they can be provoked
quickly
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quickly, hence
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 living individually reduced the chances of conflicts among families. Various
researches
a scientist who devotes himself to doing research
researchers
 around the globe have suggested that single families have fewer issues than extended
one
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.
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 to
this
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, privacy is imperative for today’s generation, when people live separate from their families they can maintain private space, which is quite difficult in case of extended families.
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,
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 living in joint family is beneficial in terms of economic support, if
one
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 person faces financial crunch other
one
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 can help,
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sometimes become
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sometimes becomes
 the major cause of conflicts later on.
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, Person who
live
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lives
 alone might feel depressed due to loneliness, there might not be anybody to discuss the crucial
life
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problems whereas
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problems, whereas
, living in a full family provides various people to discuss the issues. In conclusion, I opine that
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 big families
provides
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provide
 support sometimes yet, living alone gives you
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
 to live freely on your terms and people can maintain their healthy relations among relative on account of fewer arguments.
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Thus I
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Thus, I
 firmly believe it is a positive development towards
growth
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the growth
 of
economy
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the economy
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