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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#universities #numbers #students
It is often argued that in some post graduate lectures the amount of gender attendance is quite different. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think that it is not due to university qualification for attending to a
subject
 but more about
student
 preference and
futur
the time yet to come
future
orientation
.
First
 of all,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that
student
choose
Suggestion
chooses
 their course
subject
 according their preference. They can choose the
subject
 they want to study and do not attend to other they do not like
such
 as mathematic because it is too difficult to understand.
This
 method
promote
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promotes
 better results for
studentand
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student and
 help them to be more focus.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
 it is reported that
moste
used to form the superlative
most
male
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males
 are attracted by engineering than female. The reason of these
result
Suggestion
results
 is due to their education males
prefere
Suggestion
prefers
prefer
preferred
 studies
sometion
at some indefinite or unstated time
sometime
 related to
mecanic
the branch of physics concerned with the motion of bodies in a frame of reference
mechanics
mechanical
, cars and aerospace
wherease
on the other hand
whereas
 females
prefere
more desirable than another
preferred
prefer
 medicine, art and literacy.
Therefore
,
this
constat
an occasion on which a winner is selected from among two or more contestants
contest
 is more a stigmatization than the reality. It is for
this
 reason we can find women in
mecanic
a craftsman skilled in operating machine tools
mechanic
mechanics
 course.
Moreover
, the choice of lectures
depend
Suggestion
depends
 on their
profesional
engaged in a profession or engaging in as a profession or means of livelihood
professional
orientation
. University
give
Suggestion
gives
is given
 the opportunity to their students to choose their
subject
. It is on their responsibility to find the most appropriate
subject
 for their profession.
For example
 a
student
 who
want
Suggestion
wants
 to work as doctor will choose
subject
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subjects
such
 as chemistry
;
Accept space
;
 biochemistry
although
 a
futur
to or at a greater extent or degree or a more advanced stage ('further' is used more often than 'farther' in this abstract sense)
further
future
informatician
a message received and understood
information
 will prefer to learn more about
informatic
the sciences concerned with gathering, manipulating, storing, retrieving, and classifying recorded information
informatics
 and mathematic than read a book and write
essayes
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essays
 for
litteracy class
Suggestion
a literacy class
literacy class
literacy classes
.
Thus
, it is more appropriate to say that the number people per
subject
 depend on their
orientation
 and not their gender. In conclusion, i strongly believe that the number of
student
 according their gender do not depend on the university decision but on
student
 preference and work
orientation

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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