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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility to university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
As we all aware, now a
days
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day
, reaching out to university
has became
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has become
 highly
challening
requiring full use of your abilities or resources
challenging
.
This
 essay agrees to
this
 fact. The essay
first
 look into the troubles of the underprivileged and
then
 will discuss on the inconvenience of
the wealthy
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wealthier
the wealthier
the wealthiest
 students. As like most of the educational institutions,
this
 college has its own norms, especially
on
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in
for
 the transportation. It
is mandate
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is mandated
to
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for
 all students to use only the university bus.
which
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Which
 obviously means that everyone needs to pay their transportation fee.
Besides
 having plenty of low-cost travel options, like public transits, bike
poolings
an excavation that is (usually) filled with water
pools
, economically backward grads
has
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have
 to
bare
have
bear
this
 expense. For an instance, if a
gradute
receive an academic degree upon completion of one's studies
graduate
 opts train facility, it costs him approximately Rs.1000/- per month, which is far more cheaper than the one he was charged.
On the other hand
, the high society pupils find it hard to use
this
 mode of transportation. The most common problem they foresee is the timing. With no exceptions, they have to show up.
Furthermore
, they lack their
comfortness
things that make you comfortable and at ease
comforts
 in
this
.
For example
, a high society student can come in his
luxuary
something that is an indulgence rather than a necessity
luxury
 car without any hassle.
However it
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However, it
 is not encouraged here. Ultimately, everyone has some complications in accessing the university, which is not limited to students alone.
However
, it has to be accepted that
univeristy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
 is treating each and
everyone equally
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everyone, equally
 irrespective of their social status.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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