Some people say that a person’s success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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BEING SUCCESSFUL IS NOT EVERYBODY'S BUSINESS. THERE IS PERCEPTION PERVAILENT IN THE SOCIETY THAT THE SUCCESS OF AN INDIVIDUAL DEPENDS UPON HOW ONE IS BEING NURTURED BY HIS

FAMILY

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THROUGHOUT THE CRUCIAL PERIOD OF LIFE. I AM IN COMPLETE AGREEMENT WITH

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NOTION BECAUSE AS PER MY OPINION PROMINENT TRAITS REQUIRED FOR BEING SUCCESSFUL OUGHT TO BE IMBIBED IN A PERSON BY ONE'S CLOSE RELATIONS. TO EMBARK ON, ADMITTEDLY, VICTORY OF A PERSON DEPENDS PROMINENTLY UPON THE ENVIRONMENT WHICH IS OFFERED AT HOME. CONDUCTIVE AMBIENCE FOR STUDIES AS WELL AS WORK NOT ONLY FOCUS THE ENRGY IN RIGHT DIRECTION BUT

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ASSISTS TO DEVELOP HIGHER LEVEL CONCENTRATION, LEADING TO FATHOMLESS POSITIVE REULTS BY JUST PUTTING LIMITED EFFORTS. WHAT IS MORE, SUPPORTIVE PARENTS ARE LIKE PILLARS WHO ALWAYS STAND BY WITH THEIR CHILDREN IN EVERY SITUATION, AND INDUCING CONTINUOUS PROGRESSIVE FEEDBACK, WHICH IS SUPPORTED BY THE ARTICLE PUBLISHED BY DR. SIGMUND FREUD IN HIS BOOK ON STUDY OF HUMAN PSYCHOLOGY IN 1925, BY STATING THAT

FAMILY

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SUPPORT CAN BREATHE NEW LIFE IN AN INDIVIDUAL,

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SHOWING THE PATHWAY TO NEW HIGHTS. PROBING

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, SUCCESS DEMANDS PLETHORA OF PERSONALITY TRAITS, THOSE ARE

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IMBIBED BY THE

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. LEARNING MYRIAD QUALITIES FROM MEMBER

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AS COOPERATION FROM SIBLINS BY SHARING TOYS AND OTHER BELONGINGS, RELENTLESS WORKING HABITS FROM FATHER, WHO EARN FOR THE WHOLE

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WITHOUT BEING TAKING CARE OF HIMSELF, BEING CALM AND CHEERFUL FROM MOTHER, WHO FULFILL EVERYONE'S DEMANDS AND

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SPREADING KNOWLEDGR FROM GRSNDPSRENTS WHO ARE THE STORE HOUSE OF EXPERIENCES.

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, GROWING UNDER THE SHADOW OF

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PERSONALITIES IS SEEMS A VIABLE SOURSE OF INCULCATING BALANCED PERSONALITY HABITS REQUIRED FOR BECOMING SUCCESSFUL. IN CONCLUSION, LOOKING AT THE DELIBERATIONS, IT CAN BE CATEGORICALLY ESTABLISHED THAT FAMILYMEMBERS ARE AN IMPERATIVE PART OF AN INDIVIDUAL'S LIFE, PRESENCE OF WHOSE HAND HOLDING CAN WORK WONDERS.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

306 words

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