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You and some friends ate a meal at restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and services. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. I n your letter •Give details of your visit to the restaurant •Explain the reason for the celebration •Say what was good about the food and the services

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well and in good spirits. I am writing
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 letter to express my wonderful experience at your restaurant. As it was our graduation day on 20th
march
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March
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 and we
all
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were all
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have
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apply
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done with our ceremony. After that we all decided to have
a
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dinner together, as it
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last
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the last
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 time, all
classmates
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our classmates
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 united. We are so satisfied with our grades and it is time to celebrate our
hardwork
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hard work
 that we did for our studies.
Morever
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Moreover
, it is
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 my
bestfriend's
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best friend's
 birthday on that date and your staff planned a pleasant surprise for her, by bringing cake and balloons. We ordered Italian food , it was so delicious
as well
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as
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and
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 the presentation
is
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was
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 outstanding. The plates are full of
colors
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colours
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, with some healthy vegetables.
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, the staff is brilliant, and the way they are communicating and serving is so polite. I look forward to
be
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 there soon. Yours sincerely Kiranpreet
kaur
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Kaur
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coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that the details of your visit are presented in a clear chronological order. For instance, mention the date of the celebration before describing the meal to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using more varied sentence structures to enhance the flow of your writing. This will help maintain the reader's interest and improve overall cohesion.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for small grammatical errors, such as 'Morever' which should be 'Moreover,' to improve the professionalism of your letter.
task achievement
You effectively conveyed the purpose of your visit and blended it nicely with a celebration, making the letter engaging.
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Your use of polite expressions and a positive tone demonstrates an excellent writing style appropriate for a letter to a restaurant manager.
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The description of the food and service was vivid and provided a clear image of your positive experience at the restaurant.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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